Beauty in the Sky

Copyright - Janet Webb

The mother and young daughter reached the alley behind the restaurant.  The girl stretched her arms toward the sun for warmth and noticed the beautiful dress hanging from the balcony.

“Mama, you tink we ever be able to buy me a dress like dat?” she said pointing upward.

“Naw! Don’t be silly child.  You know we aint gonna be able to afford anything like dat.  Dats for rich folks.  Be happy for what you got. Now turn a’round and take dis from mama, ya hear me,” she said holding bread still in its plastic wrapper.

Molly turned away from the bright-colored dress with tears in her eyes. “Yes ma’am,” she said.

I went over the word limit.  Just couldn’t cut anymore and make this work.  Hopefully it does.

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Till we meet again.  Good day.

Mind of Shoo

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23 thoughts on “Beauty in the Sky

  1. I am sure there is extra words from the community we could collect to cover your balance. I liked the story and felt the little girl’s unquenched desire.

  2. Good story. The dialect is internally consistent, which is all that matters. As for length, clearly it’s the length it needs to be. You can’t let yourself be restricted by arbitrary, externally imposed limits. Besides Rochells says “No one will be ostracized for going over or under the word count.”

    (I’m comforting myself here. In four stories now, I’ve never managed to hit 100 on the nose. 🙂 )

  3. Dear Shoo,
    What’s important is to make every word count. I’d never have known if you hadn’t told me that you went over.(This isn’t license to post a 500 worder ;)) It was a good story. I hope the child in this story rises above her mother’s expectations.
    shalom,
    Rochelle

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