I found him in the study…moving books around as if he was the head librarian.
“Father,” I said.
“Yes'” he said as he stepped out from behind the ladder.
My father was my guiding force through my youth though I never told him how I felt. Now, I can’t. He doesn’t know me. He doesn’t know anything but this library. It’s strange how disease can take a man’s family away from him yet he can read, understand and be intelligently vibrant. This library is his life now. His family he has long forgot. I take care of him. This is his study in my home.
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There is more to this..at least it feels like it. Sometimes…the story is not nearly complete but I hope that someone feels something from what is here. I didn’t want to change what was here just to keep it in the word limitation. I like what is here. I don’t know why. I just do.
Till we meet again.
Good Day.
Mind of Shoo
This story touched my heart.
janet
Awe thanks. There could be so much more to this and I was worried about publishing it. I am glad it touched you. TY
I like what’s there too, sort of, not completely lost.
Not completely lost…but totally to those who matter. TY. Glad you liked it.
brilliantly understated yet evoking powerful emotions in the reader… that would be me
As always, thank you Melanie. Glad you enjoyed the read.
Sad and understated. A wealth of sentiment and history behind the words.
Thanks for the compliment especially coming from a talented writer as yourself. TY
Wonderful stage you set and use for the larger picture bud.
TY Pete.
I love this!… Very deep and very warm…
TY..glad you enjoyed it.
Ouch!
Very well done.
Seems to be a bit of a theme in recent days:
http://anelephantcant.me/2013/04/23/the-peace-lily-ligo-haibun-challenge/
Theme? Thanks for the compliment. I appreciate it.
Dear Shoo,
A sensitive piece on an issue that touches most of us these days. You successfully layered your story so that in 100 words we see a lifetime that’s been stolen. It could be longer if you want to pursue it but IMHO it’s powerful as is.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Beautifully done, and no changes needed to evoke the emotions.
A truth many of us have witnessed and all fear will be our future. Well written Shoo.
Thanks Joe. Nice of you to say. And yes it is something to be fearful of.
This is very truthful unfortunately
The mind is a strange place. That would be a heartbreaking situation to be in.
~ I do too.