Trapped like a scared mouse,
I cower in the corner.
My father above me.
His look stone like.
“Please don’t hit me again.”
With pleasure in his eyes
he unleashed his anger.
This fiction was written for Trifextra: Week Fifty-eight.
This weekend, we want you to give us a thirty-three response using the wordstone as one of your thirty-three words. You can use any definition of the word that you’d like, but we are specifically looking for serious, well-conceived entries. This isn’t the weekend for light-hearted posts about the difficulty of posting before the linkz close, and we are not looking for hilarious commentary about your cats (THIS time). We want something serious and deep from you guys this weekend, because the sun is starting to shine a bit more, and we think we can handle it now. Take your time with it and give us your very best work.
Mind of Shoo 
I’m glad this is fiction…for you. Sadly, that is not the case for every child. Powerfully written.
You are so correct. If it happens once it is too much. TY
Powerful and painful. Thank you for sharing.
Thanks for taking time to read it. TY
How sad that some adults think that they can hit out at a child just because they are physically more powerful!It never resolves anything & the child carries the scars on his/her psyche forever.Very well written,it moved me.
It’s a sad situation indeed. I am sure they will carry that scar forever.
😦
oh, that brought a shiver to my spine to think of the hopelessness a child feels when being bullied by the hand that should be the caretaker 😦
Me too. So defenseless.
This is so sad and so powerfully expressed. Horrible to think there are people like that in the world.
I know but I bet there are plenty. One is too many.
This made me teary eyed. Very emotional
Awe TY D.
That was very emotional and described so that I had the picture in my mind of this sad abused little boy. Well written.
Thanks for the compliment. TY 🙂
This is horribly sad. Not that violence is a solution…but I kind of want to kick him in the shins and get that child out of there 🙂
I wanted to kick him somewhere else..but the shin works too.
I can relate to the feelings in this. Great piece. Image goes perfectly with it too. Well done, Shoo.
Thanks Scriptor. Glad you liked it.
The single word “pleasure”, so cruelly juxtaposed with the tone, sent a shiver down my back. Nicely done.
Glad you caugth that. TY
Oh this is horrible. Very well articulated.
Thanks for the compliment. It is so very wrong.
Great job with the prompt. Sad story.
TY
What a terrifying experience. Your piece is very powerful.
“Trapped like a scared mouse”… what a perfect line to set the tone. This piece moved me. Nicely done.
Beautifully written but incredibly sad. Well done!.
This is such a powerful piece . . . and the picture you chose illustrates your words perfectly.
Pleasure?