The projectiles scream in flight,
ripping flesh howls in pain.
The grunting floor absorbs the fallen.
Silence yells as life ceases.
Blood spitting onto white carpet.
Four walls cry at the view below.
This was difficult for me. Not sure if I got the essance of personifaction.
This was written for Trifextra: Week Fifty-two
We want you to give us a 33-word example of personification. Wait. What? You forget what that is? It’s the practice of attaching human traits and characteristics with inanimate objects, pheomena and animals. (http://literary-devices.com).
I think you did just fine. Thanks for sharing your good work.
Thanks for reading it Tom.
I think you did well 🙂
I think you got it! I have to say, the picture of red wine on white carpet makes me want to get the stain out (OCD tendencies, I think :))
Oh that made me giggle! Don’t worry, I’ll clean it. But is it wine or blood? Hmmm….only I know 🙂
I think this is phenomenal-personification in each line bringing to mind the horrific scene vividly!The photo complements the poem beautifully,Mind of Shoo:-)
Awe…you’re too kind! This was really difficult for me for some reason. It felt herky jerky LOL
:-)it feels that way sometimes
Thanks Joe. I appreciate the comment!
Vivid, striking, and very good writing.
Thanks for the compliment Draug…even more coming from you. TY
Looks like personification to me! Great job 😀
You know…I saw the title of the blog, ‘Adult child of alcoholic parent’ and realized this personification (with the wine) may go even deeper in metaphor…
Interesting observation 🙂 I would say lots of my writing has that as its foundation so to speak. TY for the thoughtful comments.
The idea of silence yelling is clever. I understand what you mean by that perfectly.
Glad you liked and understood that line. It makes perfect sense to me. Especially in that situation. 🙂
This is really good – very vivid imagery. Well done!
TY Suzanne. I appreciate the kind words.
Your descriptions are really good! Great post!
Thanks as always Deana. You’re always kind! TY
A wild ride – I like silence yells… and flesh howls. Sad state of affairs but it made for some fine writing.
Very sad state of affairs indeed. Glad you enjoyed it. TY
I found this beautiful. ‘Silence yells as life ceases’. That line really grabbed me. Thanks for sharing this!
Thanks so much for the wonderful comment. I like that line as well….its like you can actually hear nothing…in my mind at least. TY
ripping flesh howls in pain… i think that about does it.
I’d try soda water on the wine spillage… very graphic, well done.
Soda water..I never would have guessed that. Next time there is blood on my nice white carpet I’ll give it a try. TY. 🙂
You need to be quick with it. 🙂
Yup. You did it. Not only did you give us personification, you also gave us a lovely oxymoron with the yelling silence. Nicely done!
Nice job taking a traumatic scene and flipping the point of view to the objects in the room. In an odd way if gave me something to think about, or maybe that’s the philosophical side of me. lol.
Thanks…glad you had that response to my writing. TY
This entire house aches with pain. Beautiful!
Very nice….that would be a nice addition if we had more words to use. TY
You did a great job!